Throw Back. (First Day Of School)!

2nd Draft; Shouting, Rushing, Pulling, I was getting ready for my first day at school. My mum was angry at me she couldn’t stop pulling my hair. After all the pulling and shouting we took off to go and check what class I was in. As we walked my mum noticed a family member of ours and said Hi. We carried on walking and we got to the office.

“Hello were here to ask for what class Asena is in?” My mum asked. “Oh yes she is in room 4” The lady replied. So we walked off and we got to my class and I nervously walked in. I really liked my class and my mum and dad were talking with my teacher while I was making some new friends. As I was talking to my new friends my teacher called me to come and meet her. She was very generous and really kind!

My new teacher introduced herself to me and she told me her name was Miss Wild. She was so kind and I really liked her. She was always cheerful and tells really funny jokes and we would always play gotcha! Gotcha was this maths game where the teacher choose’s two students and then she ask’s them a maths question and the person who answer’s firs has to say Gotcha. It was a really fun game.

My first friends were Mele, Aldora and Tyla Marie. They were really laughable and we would always tell each other secrets. We always played together and sit next to each other in class.

I felt really happy at the end because my friends were always by my side and My first day at school was like a dream come true!

1st Draft;

Today we had 40 minutes to write about our first day of school. From looking at our writing we are going to set some writing goals for the term.!

Shouting, Rushing, Pulling, I was getting ready for my first day at school. My mum was angry at me she couldn't stop pulling my hair. After all the pulling and shouting we took off to go and check what class I was in. As we walked my mum noticed a family member of ours and said Hi. We carried on walking and we got to the office.

“Hello were here to ask for what class is Asena in?” My mum asked. “Oh yes she is in room 4” The lady replied. So we walked off and we got to my class and I nervously walked in.

I really liked my class and my mum and dad were talking with my teacher while I was making some new friends. As I was talking to my new friends my teacher called me to come and meet her. She was very generous and really kind and.

My new teacher introduced herself to me and Her name was Miss Wild. She was so kind and I really liked her. She always read a book every time after morning tea and we would always play gotcha. Gotcha was this maths game where the teacher choose’s two students and then she ask’s them a maths question and the person who answer’s has to say Gotcha. It was a really fun game.

My first friend was Mele, Aldora and Tyla Marie. They were really laughable and we would always tell each other secrets. We always played together and sit next to each other in class. We also would sit up and try not to talk when the teacher was talking.

I felt really happy at the end because my friends were always by my side Especially MELE LAVAKA!